Dried and broken
In response to Hugh Garner’s “The Sound of Hollyhocks”
So brilliant yet fleeting
Full of promise and hope
He was recovering, he was
And yet, he hung from the rope
He whispered to the flowers
The flowers whispered back
Telling stories only they knew
Giving support that he lacked
He talked of a wife he cherished
But now she is gone
By the roadside, she perished
The caged polar bear was despairing and forlorn
In came the mother
Who wanted control
She wanted to fix everything
She wanted her little boy home
But he did not want that
He could not bear the thought
So he drew his last breath
And his roommate soon forgot
Your use of vocabulary, and the description are really awesome! The poem runs smoothly. I like how you wrote your poem from the perspective of a third person, who seemed to be witnessing everything that had happened in the short story. Your poem is really unique. Excellent work!
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Great work Beverly! :D I like about how you depict the whole story using neat, simple yet effective phrases. It really sets the scene and mood. I especially like the line that says the caged polar bear was desparing and forlorn. Also, I am really impressed knowing that you wrote this in such a quick time and that you even made the poem rhymes~ :)
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Wow, this is a very good poem! The words and phrases that you use are incredibly good. The poem is concise and it describes the scene well. I am stunned.
ReplyDeleteH.H
Great poem. Nice phrases.
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